Heather

[mixedblood9]

I can see you have a good sense of your character and her surroundings as well as the story; however, it seemed you sample post had more muse behind it than your description and personality. You will be accepted, but I would like to ask you to take another try at your description, personality, and maybe even the skills sections again. Paint a picture with words and let the muse flow. I apologize for the wait and I believe this is best. Our other members and, in a sense, their characters need to have a clear idea about your character even if she is camouflaged. ;D We will see you again.

Acceptance Pending

[mixedblood9]

Heather,

I would like to apologize. I do not think I came across clearly.

We need an actual description of her appearance and her personality as well as any powers and skills she possesses. A picture is not sufficient because most likely the other members will not have access to the picture and a description would be more beneficial to both the other members and the site plot development. Also, we are quite leery about you leaving room for improvement. We are afraid if members have room to improve in the actual threads, they could be tempted to improve to the point of convenience; it would be too easy to god-mode and over-power the opposing rper. Characters will naturally improve and better themselves, but at a reasonable rate just a people in real life change and improve at a gradual pace. A described personality makes it easier for other members to understand your character in addition to making the game and plot interesting. It makes this world of Algaësia more life-like and fun for our members.

To summarize, please, we need full descriptions of Heather's appearance, personality, skills, and powers. You may be allowed to change small things such as hair and items which will not affect the story as it runs.

Thank you,
MixedBlood

[shurikan]

ok i made a new and *hopefully!* correct thread. sorry about deleting these posts. i just tried to ...
meh..hope you like it!